...I Agree...

Monte · 03-04-2009, 09:36 PM

i agree,
this isnt me,
there has to be a reason,
why,
i could never say what i wanna say,
see what i wanna see,
be the way i wanna be,
perfect trees,
perfect grass,
sky so blue,
this isnt me,
it is you,
earth so strong,
there has to be a reason why,
what i thought was wrong,
what could it be?
why am i me?
i could never feel the way i wanna feel,
lead the way i wanna go,
do the things i wanna do,
perfect birds,
fly so freely,
oh i envy thee,
why arent you me?
i agree,
all these vicissitudes,
i need to elude,
find me a world,
where i can live how i wanna live,
theres got to be a way,
to live a new day,
away from me,
i agree,
this isnt me,
dark clouds on a sunny day,
its my fault,
my blackness came out to play,
oh, fear me,
i fear me,
and dare me,
to agree,
that this is me.

Monte

Mz. Bahamas · Mz. Bahamas

monte i think u n ur poetry is growing...
it's maturing to me..

Monte · Monte

awww....thank u

..

Sol-Jie · Sol-Jie

....i agree....with crazy lady

Monte · Monte

why thank u kind sir

Shana B · Shana B

if it isn't u then is who

great as usual miss poecist

Sol-Jie · Sol-Jie

havent read them in a minute so i probably been missin out alot

Mz. Bahamas · Mz. Bahamas

@ montz

np

@ sol-jie

stop copyin me

Monte · Monte

@ shana....

thanks maddy

@ sol-jie....yea...havent been in the writing mood since lately....slowly gettin back in it.

@ cl...zeen

BlueSerenity · BlueSerenity

i read this twice and got the same emotions...it felt like riding small waves...the over all feeling i got from it was melancholy...because most of the sentences(the low parts of the waves) seem sorrowful...in the higher parts there is the longing feeling for different...so altho those sentences make the spirit rise bc its about "nice" things it still sad...again giving the overall feeling of melancholy...or maybe im just reading too much into it...

...either way...good job...

Monte · Monte

yea its a sad poem basically....wrote it when i was a lil down....but sometimes when i write...i wanna throw a "positive" part in to see if it wud help counteract the feeling it may give off or my feeling..kinda showing that theres ups and downs no matter what....so if im down...theres a way to bring myself up....thanks bluey

03-04-2009, 09:36 PM	#1
...I Agree... i agree, this isnt me, there has to be a reason, why, i could never say what i wanna say, see what i wanna see, be the way i wanna be, perfect trees, perfect grass, sky so blue, this isnt me, it is you, earth so strong, there has to be a reason why, what i thought was wrong, what could it be? why am i me? i could never feel the way i wanna feel, lead the way i wanna go, do the things i wanna do, perfect birds, fly so freely, oh i envy thee, why arent you me? i agree, all these vicissitudes, i need to elude, find me a world, where i can live how i wanna live, theres got to be a way, to live a new day, away from me, i agree, this isnt me, dark clouds on a sunny day, its my fault, my blackness came out to play, oh, fear me, i fear me, and dare me, to agree, that this is me. Monte __________________	About Poster By: Monte Join Date: Sep 2006 Networking Rating: None Add To Favorite Share Views: 262

BlueSerenity	post #10 03-06-2009, 12:24 PM
Lyrical Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Dhaz Street Cred : 22 Posts: 19,477 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 72	i read this twice and got the same emotions...it felt like riding small waves...the over all feeling i got from it was melancholy...because most of the sentences(the low parts of the waves) seem sorrowful...in the higher parts there is the longing feeling for different...so altho those sentences make the spirit rise bc its about "nice" things it still sad...again giving the overall feeling of melancholy...or maybe im just reading too much into it......either way...good job...

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Mz. Bahamas	post #2 03-04-2009, 09:43 PM
Dhaz BattleDome HypeGirl Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Georgia Street Cred : 3 Posts: 14,166 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 31	monte i think u n ur poetry is growing... it's maturing to me..

Monte	post #3 03-04-2009, 09:45 PM
Caramel Flava ChiC Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: check yah mirror Street Cred : 17 Posts: 36,147 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 55	awww....thank u ..

Sol-Jie	post #4 03-04-2009, 09:50 PM
-Dhaz General- Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: noitacoL Street Cred : 5 Posts: 8,170 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 51	....i agree....with crazy lady

Monte	post #5 03-04-2009, 09:50 PM
Caramel Flava ChiC Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: check yah mirror Street Cred : 17 Posts: 36,147 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 55	why thank u kind sir

Shana B	post #6 03-04-2009, 09:51 PM
Dhaz Lone Ranger Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: In My Own Lil Worl Street Cred : 7 Posts: 14,093 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 43	if it isn't u then is who great as usual miss poecist

Sol-Jie	post #7 03-04-2009, 09:52 PM
-Dhaz General- Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: noitacoL Street Cred : 5 Posts: 8,170 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 51	havent read them in a minute so i probably been missin out alot

Mz. Bahamas	post #8 03-04-2009, 09:52 PM
Dhaz BattleDome HypeGirl Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Georgia Street Cred : 3 Posts: 14,166 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 31	@ montz np @ sol-jie stop copyin me

Monte	post #9 03-04-2009, 09:55 PM
Caramel Flava ChiC Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: check yah mirror Street Cred : 17 Posts: 36,147 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 55	@ shana.... thanks maddy @ sol-jie....yea...havent been in the writing mood since lately....slowly gettin back in it. @ cl...zeen

Monte	post #11 03-06-2009, 04:52 PM
Caramel Flava ChiC Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: check yah mirror Street Cred : 17 Posts: 36,147 Dhaz Dollarz: 500 Gifts: 55	yea its a sad poem basically....wrote it when i was a lil down....but sometimes when i write...i wanna throw a "positive" part in to see if it wud help counteract the feeling it may give off or my feeling..kinda showing that theres ups and downs no matter what....so if im down...theres a way to bring myself up....thanks bluey